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#11
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.... to fast.
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#12
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The cream
i think this is rubbish av never done a story on a season before so it was worth a try, my writing isnt so good and i dont know how to use the graphics. any feedback would be useful as i may continue with this.
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#13
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![]() It's alright I guess..
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#14
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great story man
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#15
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i agree needs more
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#16
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aww don't listen to them. i liked it.
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#17
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I like it needs more
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#18
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Very sexy story
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#19
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great start
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#20
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Has potential, but needs an editor.
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