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jacobx 24th May 2009 04:03 AM

.... to fast.

and confusing.

MagicOPromotion 12th June 2009 10:42 AM

The cream
i think this is rubbish av never done a story on a season before so it was worth a try, my writing isnt so good and i dont know how to use the graphics. any feedback would be useful as i may continue with this.

LookingForGainer 12th June 2009 01:03 PM

It's alright I guess..
Just feel like it was a little bit underdeveloped.

bazookiejoe 22nd February 2010 12:06 PM

great story man

bazookiejoe 22nd February 2010 12:09 PM

i agree needs more ;)

mdminc747 2nd March 2010 10:52 PM

aww don't listen to them. i liked it.

cool=fat 24th November 2010 05:26 AM

I like it needs more

fatbellys 5th March 2011 08:17 AM

Very sexy story ;)

garfield 27th March 2011 04:40 PM

great start

speedoguy38 1st April 2012 09:47 AM

Has potential, but needs an editor.

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